scitzo.. feedback if possible..

[underestimated]

i wrote this on behalf of my girlfriend, she's goin thru some tough shit.. she says i don't understand her, but when she saw this she knew that i really did..

anti depressants and sleeping pills is what the doctor gave me
sat in my corner hearin voices.. i wish someone could maybe save me
i can't handle this i'm goin delusional i think i'm goin insane
who's to blame for my mind playin tricks on me, half way between reality my dreams take over my brain..
someone please help me, noone seems to understand what i'm going through
in a world of my own i'm feelin suicidal, i really wish i knew how to stop this-i wish i knew what to do
it feels like i've lost everyone like i'm stuck on a deserted island by myself
these drugs the doctor gave me... i feel they aint really doin much use on my health
somebody save me i need someone to talk to before i go even more crazy
dreams become reality but my reality becomes somewhat hazey
i grabbed a kitchen knife and i'm about to put it in my stomach but martin stops me
he takes the knife off me and hides it before i harm myself so god please help me...

[swiftyct]

its alright its hard to rhyme good about true life stuff but u did ok ill give you 7/10

[underestimated]

yeah i find it hard too.. but when its real life and you get the first couple of lines down.. the rest kinda flows with it.. i've had some good feedback on some other sites i use, so thought i'd see what people thought on here.. its a real heartfelt piece.. thanks for the 7/10.. its not often i drop summat like this so i'm happy bout that